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At ~Z~ Nightclub
All the single ladies hit dance floor at Z nightclub
Every macho man tries to squeeze in for a rub
Evolutionary psychology is at play beneath black light
Skin bared while courtships flare with neon smiles so bright
Many different voices clamor for attention
Male and female seek each other's validation
Women project sensuality and men go with aggression
Hips swing and heads swim in wild anticipation
Subwoofers deafen as sight is confounded by booze
Arms flail upward setting their inhibitions loose
Mania overtakes, breaking a flimsy truce
Society sheds civility for carnality's caboose
DJ priests of Techno spin out another break
Everything is given for those who know to take
One might feel as if dreaming even being wide awake
Shuffling to the beat, countless happy feet produce a quake
Cameras flash at giddy partygoer poses
Some tilt down their necks, others turn up noses
Lasers beam through icy vapor doses
Fleeting moments frozen by those who chose this
It all happens at Z nightclub ~ Every weekend everywhere ~ Why pursue more meaning ~ When its plain and simple there ?
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This one has a rap or spoken-word feel to it. Bravo!
This starts so well, but then it gets stagnant. You can move farther than from evolutionary psych to carnal lusts beneath the veneer. More image maybe? The rhymes help anchor the meter and I liked the way you start the lines w/ trochees.
Edit it. This one will reward your efforts.
I love my self too much to be narcissistic
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